******* FIRST DRAFT*******
SCENE 4: INT. ONE ROOM SHACK. MORNING
SFX: SHOES BEING BRUSHED AND BUFFED.
BOSS: (SINGING) money money money money MONEY! money money money money MONEY! Ha ha! To make money, you have to look like money: smart shirt, nice trousers but very important polished shiny shoes. Ha ha!
SFX: PHONE RINGS LOUD ONCE THEN STOPS.
BOSS: Broke bastard. I hate beepers.
SFX: PHONE RINGS LOUD ONCE THEN STOPS.
BOSS: People can deceive: I can make you rich. How can you make other people rich when you can’t even afford airtime for your phone? Shiiyah! I have no time for promises today. Cash deals. That’s what I want.
SFX: MESSAGE TONE.
BOSS: (READING) Call Now. Real Cash Money Today. Does he think I was born yesterday? No way. If you have cash money, put cash money in your phone and call. Shiiyah!
SFX: PHONE RINGS AND KEEPS RINGING.
BOSS: Very good. (PICKS UP) Wangi boss, Ah my friend I’m also very broke. Hah, these days mwana even when visitors come we hide the bread and serve tea without sugar – we are no longer people, we just survive like animals… that’s what I’m saying… now, before you finish your airtime what is the deal? Yes… yes… I know him. Eish! …the police are on fire these days mwana – how much is he paying? When does he want the kid? Hah, that is such short notice. He has to add the money… at least two million… mwana, parents have become sharp. You think these days kids just allow? I will have to take the kid by force… that’s what I’m saying… add the money… (DISCONNECTED TONE) Aargh!
BOSS: What do I do? If I call him back he’ll know I had airtime the whole time. If I don’t he might get someone else. Aargh! This money is too good. Let me just –
SFX: PHONE RINGS AND KEEPS RINGING.
BOSS: My friend, so sorry about this broke-ness… he has agreed?… very good… the usual. Yes I know. You know girls are easier. If I check her ears for no holes then usually she is intact. He wants a boy? It must be a boy… OK… OK… but I told you parents are very sharp these days, boys are now all circumcised. Yes I want the money. OK – one young boy, no marks, by tonight. I’m going to need a deposit. Yes I can come to the shop. Ten minutes. Bye. (SINGING) money money money money MONEY! money money money money MONEY!
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SCENE 4: INT. ONE ROOM SHACK. MORNING
SFX: SHOES BEING BRUSHED AND BUFFED.
BOSS: (SINGING) money money money money MONEY! money money money money MONEY! Ha ha!
SFX: SHOE BRUSHING AND BUFFING CONTINUES.
SFX: MOBILE PHONE RINGS.
BOSS: (PICKS UP) Wangi boss (BEAT) ah, my friend I’m also very broke. Mwana these days when visitors come we hide the bread and serve tea without sugar – we are no longer people, we just survive like animals. (BEAT) Eh that big man? I know him. How much is he paying? (BEAT) When does he want the boy? (BEAT) Hah, that is such short notice. Does it have to be a boy for the ritual? Girls are easier. To find a boy with no cuts, no scars, not circumcised? Eh boss! (BEAT) Of course I want the money, nawe relax. (BEAT) It’s Ok. Yes yes OK: One boy, no scars, no cuts, not circumcised, tonight. As you know Mwana, I always make it happen (BEAT) Yes bye.
SFX: PHONE DISCONNECTED TONE.
BOSS: (SINGING) money money money money MONEY! money money money money MONEY!
